Kia Ora Zac. You have made some great word choices! These help to create an image in the reader's mind, and I certainly have a vivid picture in my mind after reading your writing. I can clearly see the rocky cliffs and darkness of the caves. Also, I could see Aiden panicking as the lava began spilling over the edge. Great work!
Poor Aiden! That was a lot of effort he went to just to be incinerated :( You use lots of interesting words to make your story feel exciting and to keep you readers interested - well done.
Kia Ora Zac
ReplyDeleteGreat use of adjectives and other vocabulary to make a compelling to read story! I was on the edge of my chair as I read it! Well done.
Kia Ora Zac. You have made some great word choices! These help to create an image in the reader's mind, and I certainly have a vivid picture in my mind after reading your writing. I can clearly see the rocky cliffs and darkness of the caves. Also, I could see Aiden panicking as the lava began spilling over the edge. Great work!
ReplyDeletePoor Aiden! That was a lot of effort he went to just to be incinerated :(
ReplyDeleteYou use lots of interesting words to make your story feel exciting and to keep you readers interested - well done.